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Wedding Vows
Words are important on your wedding day.
Say
exactly what is in your heart...
The Star Keeper
- Hold the ceremony......
What is your name? (required)
Robert McPhail
Your email address? (required)
XtremeZ26@aol.com
Who do you want the poem written for?
Trisha
Why do you want the poem written?
We are getting married, and I want it read to her during the ceremony. Not as
vows, but more as a special surprise part of the wedding.
What are the key messages you would like the poem to send?
The things I love about her:
-how she brings me closer to God...
-how she makes me feel like I'm right even when she knows I'm wrong...
-how she supported my passion for motorcycles even though it scared her to
death; she said, "If you die, I'll kill you." Pleas use that line if you can.
-how she stood by me after my wreck and during my surgery on a broken
cheekbone...
-her childlike love for animals...
-how she lights up my day with just one smile...
-how I'm honored that she chose me over the million other guys who would love to
be in my shoes
Do you have any funny, sad, happy, embarrassing or otherwise memorable moments
that you would like to share?
One moment that I would love to be included is when Trisha took me out for my
26th birthday. We went out to eat then she took me to a park in Cary. She
brought a candle, some grapes, and sparkling grape juice. It was the sweetest
thing anyone had ever done for me. We had a wonderful conversation. Then we
stopped talking for just a minute and looked up at the night sky. At that very
moment, a shooting star shot across the sky. It was the most perfect moment I
had ever experienced.
Do you have any other comments or thoughts?
I would also like to use a song lyric from Tracy Byrd's "Keeper of the Stars."
I would like for this to end the poem. -"I tip my hat to the keeper of the
stars. He knew what he was doing when he joined these two hearts. I hold
everything when I hold you in my arms. I've got all I'll ever need thanks to
the keeper of the stars."
What style of poem would you prefer? (Happy, sad, romantic etc.)
Romantic; w/a humorous point
Desired Package:
Unique
Extra Comments:
I would like for the poem to be romantic first of all, but because I'm known for
making people laugh, I would like there to be at least one part that people can
laugh at. Preferably near the beginning or middle, and end it romantically. It
would be great if you could include all that I wrote in the "key messages"
section and something about the shooting star story. If you had a standard
length that you go by, and you can't fit all this in it, I'll pay a little extra
to lengthen the poem. I look forward to reading the first draft. Thanks a
million.
Ladies and gentlemen,
can I have your attention please?
Every now and then in life,
there's opportunity you should
seize.
Because days, weeks, months happen,
and the years, they go so fast,
and words that should get said,
don't - and if they do, they never
last.
So I'd like to change all that,
and stop the proceedings right
there,
because I have a few words to say,
and a few feelings I'd like to
share.
You see, the person standing next
to me,
she fills my heart with bursting
pride,
and I feel like the luckiest man
alive,
because she's chosen to be my
bride.
And the things that I love about
her,
are too many to individually name,
but I'll try to list just a couple,
if it's OK with you, all the same.
Trisha brings me closer to God,
and now I know the meaning of
Divine,
and I know that I've been blessed
by Him,
because I'm just so lucky that
she's mine.
And even when she knows that I'm
wrong,
she magically makes me feel as if
I'm right,
she is my inspiration, my sunshine,
she always makes mornings out of
the darkest night.
Trisha's always supported my
passion for motorcycles,
I can't imagine the nervous times
I've put her through,
best summed up by her immortal
words:
"If you die, I'll kill you".
And Trisha stood by me after my
wreck,
and during my surgery on my broken
cheekbone,
she was a wonderful part of the
healing process,
because I never felt that I was
ever alone.
Trisha has a childlike love for
animals,
and she lights up my day with just
a smile,
and I think she lit up this whole
church,
when she gracefully walked up the
aisle.
And I feel the luckiest guy on
earth,
they'd be at least a million who'd
like to be in my shoes,
and I still find it hard to
believe,
that it was me that Trisha chose to
choose.
And I remember on my 26th birthday
we went out to eat and then went to
the park,
a candle, some grapes and sparkling
grape juice,
two lovers, in love, holding hands
after dark.
We had a simply wonderful
conversation,
and it was a magical evening, by
and by,
because the keeper of the stars
obliged,
and a shooting star shot across the
sky.
It was the most perfect experience
I've ever had,
sitting there in silence with the
one I love,
staring at the night sky in
wonderment,
as our union was blessed by the
heavens above.
And that shooting star was
beautiful,
but not as beautiful as the
shining star before me,
and I'm so glad that God starred
and kept Trisha,
because she'll light up my night
sky for all of eternity.
So, I tip my hat to the keeper of
the stars,
to know what he was doing when he
joined these two hearts,
I hold everything when I hold you
in my arms,
I've got all I'll ever need,
thanks to the keeper of the stars.
Copyright Allen Jesson :) 2002
Man.... That is it!! Your done! I have one question, though. I'm
confused about the wording of the next to last stanza. The part that says,
"and I'm so glad that God starred and kept Trisha" My question is, what are
you trying to say there? That one line throws me off. Can you clear it up
for me?
Thanks again. This is awesome! Robert
I replied:
Hi - Now you're asking some questions
- the inner workings of a crazed poet ! To explain, or at least this is
what I thought when it came to me:
1. God is the keeper of the stars.
2. A shooting star is "spent", a star
in the night sky is not.
3. Stars in the night sky are people's
light, representing each and every soul.
4. Trisha is your star.
5. God decided to keep Trisha for you,
therefore he starred (a play on words)
Heavy I know - but really meaningful.
Hope you agree.
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